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Came here from The Lunar Award's "The Pitch", glad I did! I'm hooked

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Jul 11, 2023Liked by Cameron Scott

Ooohhh hooked now!

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I haven't finished yet but I like it so far. Do you want editing suggestions?

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Now this is good!

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I'm looking forward to Chapter 2!!

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I’m very curious about the symbol and the hints of the conspiracy, and I love that the protagonist is walking away from the situation-it heightens the sense that this is something very dangerous.

“The door between worlds.

The one that was meant to be shut.”

Those are the lines that really set the hook, for me. I’m looking forward to reading more!

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Great opening chapter! You drew me in from the beginning and then we had the cosmic switch. Nicely done

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