I really enjoy the tone set by your writing, it feels fast paced and clipped in a way that enhances the character and pulls me along.
I also liked the sort of slow reveal of the gifts. I wasn’t actually positive Thorne was using a power of some sort in the restaurant. It wasn’t confusing, but intriguing, and I liked the confirmations that began rolling in and that lead up to a frank discussion of psychic gifts.
I am beyond curious to learn the details of what Alina can do with numbers, and very interested to see what other tricks Thorne has.
Also… The Artach! I knew it would show back up. That was definitely an “okay let’s go” moment, and ending on that note, with Thorne asking Alina if she needs a date, really captures the dramatic tension of the moment.
I really enjoy the tone set by your writing, it feels fast paced and clipped in a way that enhances the character and pulls me along.
I also liked the sort of slow reveal of the gifts. I wasn’t actually positive Thorne was using a power of some sort in the restaurant. It wasn’t confusing, but intriguing, and I liked the confirmations that began rolling in and that lead up to a frank discussion of psychic gifts.
I am beyond curious to learn the details of what Alina can do with numbers, and very interested to see what other tricks Thorne has.
Also… The Artach! I knew it would show back up. That was definitely an “okay let’s go” moment, and ending on that note, with Thorne asking Alina if she needs a date, really captures the dramatic tension of the moment.
Thanks Michael!!
Amazing writing of the dialogue. I imagined their faces during the discussion. Its realy caught me up.